Monday, April 27, 2009

Fame At Last

My first Mr. Vista episode has been uploaded and you can view it HERE or HERE.

The Mr. Vista blog will also feature on BBC Radio Five Live on Tuesday morning, which makes me super happy as it'll be my episode everyone will log in and see. Ooh, the fame!!!

I like Tim's version of my script even though it's not quite how I envisioned it, and it's strange and equally interesting to see how he interpreted my words. My script is below so you can see for yourself.

FADE IN:

INT. KITCHEN - DAY

Mr. Vista plonks a Tesco’s bag on the counter top, extracts a microwave meal, reads the cover.

POV: “READY IN 2 MINUTES.”

Mr. Vista licks his lips, shoves the meal in the microwave, presses buttons.

INSERT: Progress Bar “2 minutes.”

PING

INSERT: Progress Bar “Done.”

Mr. Vista extracts the meal, sticks his fork in, lifts it out. It’s still a block of ice. Back in it goes, followed by more button pressing.

INSERT: Progress Bar “2 minutes.”

PING

INSERT: Progress Bar “Done...I think?”

Mr. Vista extracts the meal, sticks his fork in again, lifts it out. It’s still a block of ice. Mr. Vista perplexed. Back in it goes, followed by frantic button pressing.

INSERT: Progress Bar “Warp Factor Ten Mr. Sulu.”

PING

INSERT: Progress Bar “It should be done now?”

Mr. Vista extracts the meal. It’s a small charred, smoking lump.

INSERT: Progress Bar “Enjoy!”

I hope the other scripts turn out equally as well.

4 comments:

Sofluid said...

Well done Dom, it's great!

Tim Clague said...

My reflection on this work is up...

http://projectorfilms.blogspot.com/2009/04/strict-script-how-close-should-you.html

Robin Kelly said...

That was a funny read Dom. I'm not sure the progress bars are necessary and maybe there could be more of how he waits but the block of ice/smoking lump contrast is classic sketch writing as it's an exaggeration of reality a lot of people have experienced which takes it far enough to be funny but not so far that you don't understand what's going on. It's even a rule of three.

Dominic Carver said...

I have read the hints for writing comedy on your website you know ;-)